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Literature
Angstxiety
I am work weak on Wednesday
in a heap of hangover and hesitation
with fingers on a phone haptically
actively anticipating feedback—
I need that why do I need that.
My angst and anxiety
is constant and courses
and throbs with a pulse
that demands concern
of a baby boomer crooning poetic
in the distance to call me antisocial, or you know,
you could just call me.
If being this busy in an age
of constant communication
feels like having slept
but not feeling rested,
I'd rather cancel my plans
like a responsible millennial
and go to bed.
Literature
Forging Foundations
there is part of me that knows these walls
in the same ways I know
unrequited was the dream I used to tie my strings to,
unrequited was the hope I used to fill myself up,
unrequited is just a word I used to be friends with
because you've crooked your fingers
into the hooks of my jeans
and you've hooked my heart,
dangling, a stranger to safety
learning how to let someone lead--
there is a piece of me that fears these feelings
like I fear insects that sting, like I fear wildfires that rage,
like I fear porcelain dolls
with cracked faces and scarred chests
because so far in this life,
all the beautiful things I've ever held
have come to me brok
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Is It Fair
Is it fair to say, I miss you
When I can't be anymore honest
Especially when I see you
I remember our promise.
We shared our lives, together
Every day, I held your hand
You had me head over heals
I could barely even stand.
Our plans for the future
Are demolished and never meant to be
Every night I miss how we were
Together, you and me.
Without you,
I'm slowly loosing my sanity
And as I cower in silence
I'm even loosing some vanity.
Is it fair to cry, every hour of the night?
And constantly stare at my phone
When I look at your photos
I have never felt more alone.
These nights are endless
I'm sick of the blood and the pai
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So this is the 500 word very short story I wrote for my intro to creative writing class. Figured I might as well post it up here. No harm done. There are no rules against posting it places that I know of.
Enjoy!
Also, I would love critiques please! Any critiques on this will help me for my final short story of about 2,000 words so any feedback would be wonderful! Anything from characterization, dialogue attribution, description, plot, setting, vocab/spelling/grammar etc, recommendations...tell me what you think!
Thank you!
Enjoy!
Also, I would love critiques please! Any critiques on this will help me for my final short story of about 2,000 words so any feedback would be wonderful! Anything from characterization, dialogue attribution, description, plot, setting, vocab/spelling/grammar etc, recommendations...tell me what you think!
Thank you!
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That ending feels a bit like foreshadowing, and I'd loved to see it explored.